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I thought
   quite truly
that the world as it is
   sat down rather cruelly
atop and atilt
   my sad little shoulders

Silly I know
   and not quite that sane
But feelings will be
   so oft' the taffy
'twixt the gut and the brain

Not the world though
   no...
   not nearly at all
but rather I think
   it is more
      of a golf ball

I heft it and heave it
   and carry it while
I pretend I don't see it
   barfing back the fake smile

A golf ball is small
   and light as a feather
but to lift it
    somehow
      it feels I will never
quite
get it
up
there...

I try and try and then
say that I can't

because, after all,

I'm just a wee ant!
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Atlasby brokenisland

Literature / Poetry / General Poetry / Free Verse©2014 brokenisland
Teaching myself some lessons in perspective.
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Given 2014-06-03
Atlas by brokenisland is an easy-going, natural sounding rhyme poem with a clever use of allegory and metaphor and memorable imagery. The train-of-thought tone enhances its philosophical nuances and evokes sympathy in the reader. ( Suggested by DanielleIvanova and Featured by GrimFace242 )
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SRSmith Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014   Writer
This is absolutely fantastic! Congratulations on a DD well deserved!
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BloodLily16 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah yes. Perspective's a killer, isn't it?
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ninitynine Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Student General Artist
never undesrtodd how to write a haiku
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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Noorislight Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014
Nice !
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014
Thank you very much!
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Student General Artist
Congratulations on your DD Nathan, really well deserved :clap: 
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014
Thank you Isabella!
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Student General Artist
You're so welcome! Heart 
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TheMidnightWhisp Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wicked! I've actually been working on a writing piece on Atlas for the past few days. :)
I really did love the picture you've painted here! :D
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