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I am
a Renaissance Man
in a WalMart generation

~

When you smile
I will grin

What you feed me
I will eat

As you shine
I will spin

By your love
I am complete

~

When you break it
I will mend it

As you ask
I will try

Though you fear it
I will rend it

If you needed
I would die

~

By your kiss
I am favored

With your voice
I am confirmed

All your whispers
I will savor

In your breath
I will burn

~

But if you bleed
I will discompose

It is not that complicated
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Renaissance Manby brokenisland

I worked on this longer than most. The inspiration was instant - but the revisions took about a month. I'm at the limit of my abilities, so I might as well set it free...
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shep4life Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Really cool
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MetaruKitsune Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"In a walmart generation" that line took me by the hair and dragged me in. Woo imagery. But seriously. Darn! Oh that doesn't sound right to me. Damn! yeah that's better. Sorry. 
Anyways. 
I love this poem.
I'm not really one for love-y-ish poems which is what I considered this to be. No offense. 
But I enjoyed the read and the flow and the everything. 
Lovely job!
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014
Well, thank you very much! Since you are obviously not into the sappy/dreamy/love-y-ish stuff..  the fact that you liked it means that I did something right I think! I will take it as a win!
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MetaruKitsune Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
As you should.
Take it as a double win why don't you? :D
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